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Save my soul
.
I have to save my soul,
there's a dozen reasons to be safe,
a hundred beautifulf faces, aces and undone shoe laces,
staring at me in the face.
.
I died, reborn in awesome bright blue skies,
given a second chance, romance, a time to dance,
with the best of the best that guage out my eyes.
Leaving your wounds, to lick at, to pick at, signs of combat.
Where were you when we rolled the dice?
.
I bled like the devil, like crucified rebels, crosses burnt into the sky,
we die, we live to sigh, a broken dream is enough reason to lie,
then we stop seeing ourselves, the lies break the mirror, and we cry
about the dented mistakes, swallow your take, even though you know it's fake.
it's like when childhood voices all but die.
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Indebted to my success, so many are happy it became marginal,
that I'm still living nothing, regretfully something, barely anything,
and one wonders why I'm a reluctant confessional,
and I've had a lifetime, to be thinking, to be forgetting, and, most of all, reliving.
every nightmare during daylight hours, on the wire, a cheap cockshuffle seconol.
.
In the last stanza, we're left looking from behind the glass,
at all the customers, crucifiers, and the ones starting our fires,
so where do we breathe? How are we relieved? Death isn't quite pretty green grass.
we stoke our own pyres, where we let out our ire, twisted misery forever,
don't bury me without a thrill, when everyone's left, be shrill, with all your will,
because.. I need to hear your not ill, that death has handed you the bill.
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lw end -<>
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Author's Comments

Inspired my Jewel, obviously. Anyway, my time without work is summed up with this and a few other things.

-DoomiT-

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:icondefiled-fallacy:
I have to say this is a great work of art. I truly am mesmerized by the powerful wording and statements. Good job there.
:icondoomit:
Thank you very much for this. I appreciate your support and feedback. Anything you would change?

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What I don't know will never hurt me, cannot forget cannot remember, this information is forever... missing time -MDMFK

-DoomiT-
:icondefiled-fallacy:
I personally would not change anything. It's like when I'm painting and it's near perfection but I'm too afraid to make any changes to prevent any mistakes. It's good as it can be in my opinion, but I'm only an amateur and it would be best to get an expert's opinion.
:icondoomit:
Alright then, nothing :)

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What I don't know will never hurt me, cannot forget cannot remember, this information is forever... missing time -MDMFK

-DoomiT-

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